My thinglink

                            Kia oraThis is an activity we did using the Thinglink app. This is the second time I have made something using Thinglink so I hope someone will give me some feedback.Ka kite ano

Term 4 Recount

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Here is the recount I wrote  for an Asttle writing test in Week 4.  Our teacher marked all our recounts and gave us our scores. Mine came out at Level 3B   which is at the end of year standard for Year Five. I got the best marks for ideas and structure and the lowest marks for vocabulary. 

We helped each other improve them by reading each other’s recount and talking about them. We also used Revision Assistant to help edit each other’s story and Mrs B added some notes as well. Everyone in our room likes Revision Assistant because it’s easy to understand the marks/ notes that it puts on your writing and so it’s quick for us to go and do the fix-ups. We have to have practically perfect grammar, punctuation and spelling in our stories before we are allowed to publish them here. I hope someone will give me some feedback.

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‘’Whoo hoo!’’ I yelled excitedly, “It's time to go to the airport, so myself and my mum can catch a plane to Australia.”  While we were waiting at the airport it was really boring so we went to get some Burger King. For my meal I had a Cheeseburger combo. After we ate I raced to our gate number 5 with my mum.  We got out some coins and had a massage on the massage machine.

When it was time to board the plane we got out our passports and showed the air hostess man. He said yes we could go through on the plane to go to Australia. I was so excited.

Once we sat down on our chair we looked to see if there was a TV with headphones but there wasn’t. How dumb is that? So myself and my mum went straight to sleep but we were uncomfortable so I sat up and got out the magazine that we had bought while we were heading to our gate. I had a bit of a read about One Direction and I found out about Louis from One Direction. He was a dad to a little boy named Frank. He looks really cute. The food finally came around but you had to pay for. It wasn’t like other planes.

Once we got off our plane we went to go get our bags from the bag machine and headed off to customs. Once we were through customs we headed out the door to find my nana, Kerry. I ran to her in my high-heel boots that went click, click, click, click. I zoomed to her and gave her a big hug like a sloth wrapped around you. We found our car and we back to  Nan's house.We had a great time.

                                               

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